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When writing we all know that the current standard is to mark thoughts/interior dialogue with italics (although there are those who say you should underline them).
Anyhow: I have a terrible time determining what is thoughts/interior dialogue and what is just deep third person POV narration. What are your opinions on it? Is there really a hard set rule on what is or is not a "thought"?
EXAMPLE 1:
Walter finally stepped out of the room and Jack closed the door with a disgusted grimace. This was insane. When did it become so hard to intimidate subordinates? No, that wasn't right. They were intimidated but they stood their ground. And so they should when dealing with totally insane orders from a superior officer.
Is everything after 'grimace' considered thoughts? Should it be:
Walter finally stepped out of the room and Jack closed the door with a disgusted grimace. This was insane. When did it become so hard to intimidate subordinates? No, that wasn't right. They were intimidated but they stood their ground. And so they should when dealing with totally insane orders from a superior officer.
That's a lot of italics. Could I go with just parts of it being thoughts.
Walter finally stepped out of the room and Jack closed the door with a disgusted grimace. This was insane. When did it become so hard to intimidate subordinates? No, that wasn't right. They were intimidated but they stood their ground. And so they should when dealing with totally insane orders from a superior officer.
Should I just rewrite the damn thing so I don't have to worry about it? I could change the last two sentences to something else that will, hopefully, not have this problem.
EXAMPLE 2:
Free of surveillance, Jack turned to the dialing computer and punched an address into the computer. His hand hovered over the palm reader for a minute, and then he placed it on the screen. There was no going back now, no time for second thoughts, no other choice. Not that there ever had been, he thought. There never really had been a choice, at all.
Would this work:
Free of surveillance, Jack turned to the dialing computer and punched an address into the computer. His hand hovered over the palm reader for a minute, and then he placed it on the screen. There was no going back now, no time for second thoughts, no other choice. Not that there ever had been. There never really had been a choice, at all.
Or does it need to be:
Free of surveillance, Jack turned to the dialing computer and punched an address into the computer. His hand hovered over the palm reader for a minute, and then he placed it on the screen. There was no going back now, no time for second thoughts, no other choice. Not that there ever had been. There never really had been a choice, at all.
I tend to write fairly deep into the POV characters thoughts. I never can tell what is thought and what is just POV character narration.
And that is driving me nuts.
I'm also beginning to hate italics.
Anyhow: I have a terrible time determining what is thoughts/interior dialogue and what is just deep third person POV narration. What are your opinions on it? Is there really a hard set rule on what is or is not a "thought"?
EXAMPLE 1:
Walter finally stepped out of the room and Jack closed the door with a disgusted grimace. This was insane. When did it become so hard to intimidate subordinates? No, that wasn't right. They were intimidated but they stood their ground. And so they should when dealing with totally insane orders from a superior officer.
Is everything after 'grimace' considered thoughts? Should it be:
Walter finally stepped out of the room and Jack closed the door with a disgusted grimace. This was insane. When did it become so hard to intimidate subordinates? No, that wasn't right. They were intimidated but they stood their ground. And so they should when dealing with totally insane orders from a superior officer.
That's a lot of italics. Could I go with just parts of it being thoughts.
Walter finally stepped out of the room and Jack closed the door with a disgusted grimace. This was insane. When did it become so hard to intimidate subordinates? No, that wasn't right. They were intimidated but they stood their ground. And so they should when dealing with totally insane orders from a superior officer.
Should I just rewrite the damn thing so I don't have to worry about it? I could change the last two sentences to something else that will, hopefully, not have this problem.
EXAMPLE 2:
Free of surveillance, Jack turned to the dialing computer and punched an address into the computer. His hand hovered over the palm reader for a minute, and then he placed it on the screen. There was no going back now, no time for second thoughts, no other choice. Not that there ever had been, he thought. There never really had been a choice, at all.
Would this work:
Free of surveillance, Jack turned to the dialing computer and punched an address into the computer. His hand hovered over the palm reader for a minute, and then he placed it on the screen. There was no going back now, no time for second thoughts, no other choice. Not that there ever had been. There never really had been a choice, at all.
Or does it need to be:
Free of surveillance, Jack turned to the dialing computer and punched an address into the computer. His hand hovered over the palm reader for a minute, and then he placed it on the screen. There was no going back now, no time for second thoughts, no other choice. Not that there ever had been. There never really had been a choice, at all.
I tend to write fairly deep into the POV characters thoughts. I never can tell what is thought and what is just POV character narration.
And that is driving me nuts.
I'm also beginning to hate italics.
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Date: 2004-12-09 12:33 pm (UTC)From:Huh. The only thing I can think is that they were on drugs.
Glad we could help!